All my life I have had the best of things—loving care,never-ending support, and even the grace of material comforts. Looking back I have found these blessings to be the basis of my being, which have helped me, evolve into who I am today. These things taught, though indirectly by my parents, were regarded as important values to learn. I cannot even imagine what my life would be like without their guidance and instilling values. As a result, I have adopted the same principles my parents regarded as fundamental, as my own personal morals and in return it has created my general outlook on life.
The positive perspectives I have developed can be attributed to the upbringing my family has given me. I was always surrounded by people who cared. Whether it was about schoolwork, sports games, an injury-- or anything really, my family has been there to give me the reassurance of help if I could not handle things on my own or if I did not have confidence in my abilities. Even then, I was never made to feel inadequate or disappointed in. I believe this kind of support was integral in building my self-esteem and let me know I could be who wanted without feeling afraid of not being accepted.
Spending time with my sister and my parents has increased my patience, understanding, and awareness of how short life is. I have learned to embrace them with their all their quirks and flaws because after all, “they are family.” I am reminded every day of how wonderful a family I have when I look in the mirror because I am a reflection of them. Family, is what I believe in.
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8 comments:
I agree that when I see my family now things are viewed differently than before I came to college. I believe it all comes with the maturity we gain through leaving our homes. A suggestion within your writing is to create a better flow through out the piece.
I agree with your idea of family. I realize how important to me the more I grow up. Do you live far from campus? After reading your intro I wondered if you lived very far which had caused you to realize how much your family meant to you. You talk about their quirks and flaws, maybe you can include some; it could make your point stronger.
I am glad to see someone who has nailed down one of the important things in life. As cliche as it is to say, family is so important. The support and relationships with them will empower your daily existence for the rest of your life. What about spending time with family has clued you into the brevity of life? Expand upon that maybe?
Family is a wonderful thing. It is so nice to know that you have people there to back you up, defend you, or help you when you need it. When I was going to Towson University, I would come home every weekend just to spend more time with my family. Moving out made me realize how wonderful they are. Now that my daughter and I live with my parents, I know that the same values you talked about are going to be instilled into her. great job!
I think that this is an interesting paper because I agree with you that most people as they get older realize how important their family is to them, but for me I have always been close to my family. My parents got divorced when I was very young and therefore it has made my brothers, sisters, and I very close. I love this paper and think that you did a great job in letting us as the reader truly believe what you believe in life.
When I was picking colleges I wanted to go as far away as possible, but I didn't get into any of the schools I wanted out-of-state. Going to UMBC helped me learn that being only half an hour from my family is just right. I would want no more or no less because having your family around gives you a strong support system. As I've gotten older I've come to respect and see my mother as more of a human being rather than the figure that controlled every aspect of my life.
But as far as your essay is concerned: I thought it was good. Maybe you can work on grabbing the reader's attention a little more at the beginning. Other than that, you're good.
Strong essay. I can relate to a number of things in your essay. When I was applying for colleges, i considered out of state. I dont know what i would do today if i had done that. I go home every weekend because i miss being at home. There's no place at home.
My only concern is, the assignment sheet said this essay has to be on a topic from the second half of the semester, such as work, school, postcolonialism. I'm not sure if family was from the second half. You should probably double check if you haven't already asked her for permission or something, JUST in CASE.
I agree, parents are important to what happens in your future. I liked your subject. One change I think will help is to make a more grabing opening.
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